Screening Feedback

Thursday was the day on which we screened our film to the class and teachers. Here is the feedback we received:
Good points:

• Good variation of camera angles and sizes
• Great costumes e.g braces
• Effective flickering lights
• Interesting framing
• Created a cliffhanger at the end
• Looks very film noir
• Good music
• Thought a lot about the mise-en-scene
• The sink scene was impressive
• Liked black and white effect
• Good voiceover script (1940's era is obvious)
• Great mise-en-scene

Bad points:

• Need to turn up voiceover
• Seems like it's finished when credits roll
• Stairs scene was too long
• Cuts during the stairwell scene felt awkward
• Sound editing could be neater
• Maybe add close up of femme-fatale
• Credits need to be throughout the opening

Things we will change:

We will record the voiceover again and make sure that Luke is closer to the microphone because before he was quite far away from it. Once we have recorded the voiceover, we will then edit the sound and make it more precise and stylish. Also, we will add dramatic music after the murderer scene as we were unable to find suitable music before the screening. The main thing that we need to change is the credits. Instead of having them at the end, we will place them between some of the scenes. This in turn might be a solution to the awkward stairs cutaways. We will cut down the scene where Jack is walking up the stairs with his hand on the bannister because the majority of people have commented on the length of the shot. At the moment we are not sure whether we will add a close up of the femme fatale as it might make the whole scene less effective if we have cutaways to Kate.

Posted by Yulia